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Maorst-Lan said 8 years, 11 months ago:

This is part of a poem, that I am still working on as of May 18, 2015. I hope you enjoy the preview….

Time and Day
I still miss you
Wishing it wasn’t all yesterday
And yesterday was today
A year or a decade
Aren’t enough
To close away these feelings

You were and are my thief

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Deleted User said 8 years, 11 months ago:

Very nice work so far!

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lasette3 said 8 years, 10 months ago:

first of all you don’t do previews for poems secondly this is extremely shallow and for something with barely one stanza its just all over the place its just terrible full of clichés a lot of the words you use don’t have an impact because we see them so much in our daily lives you should really take that into consideration to sum up your poem is shallow void of emotion and you sound pretentious

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Viskronika said 8 years, 10 months ago:

Lines 1-3 are great however it’s all downhill from there because everything else is just an amalgamation of random words and letters you read somewhere and -in your deepest naivety, thought was cool. There’s nothing really of meaning in them and they’re completely nonsensical. I’d say keep working on it, and …maybe no more previews?

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