That's a long story! I'm a busy girl and I would never have the time to edit it, but I can help you out on finding someone willing. Try posting this on the group called "Aspiring Writers." Tell a little bit about your story so people will become interested. NOTE: Letting people read your stories on the internet does not stop them from stealing your ideas or even your whole story. It has happened to me before, so make sure you trust this person. If internet help does not work you might want to put up fliers around with your email saying that you would like someone experienced in literature to edit your story.
Good work! The best of luck with your story!
