Dan said 9 years, 5 months ago:

I’ve written a short descriptive piece of creative writing and was wondering if you guys could give me some feedback Ive posted a sample of it below ^^

Rays of light broke through the cloud cover and rushed down to be refracted by the rain drops. Timidly, the light rays sparkled through raindrops tumbling to the ground. It held a wonderful greenish, yellow light, illuminating the forrest as the rain softly fell, by this time I was completely and utterly soaked. I was dripping water from the collar or my jacket and began slowly walking on the path I came from, the smile still covering my face and eyes glinting as I faced the, now covered sun. Breathing the moist, cold mountain air dried my throat and left me parched. I had pale skin, especially under the light, dark brown hair and calming, golden-brown eyes. At the moment however I was soaked through my thick dark brown jacket all the way through my dark blue turtle-neck sweatshirt underneath. “Time to return home”, I thought to myself as I leapt into a sprint deep within the forest. my dark boots trailing behind me, trying to avoid the branches and the already slippery floor, I began to wonder what people would think if they observed me running in this fashion. It seemed to me if someone may have seen me, I’d look like a distant dark blur vanishing in the thick trees. Cramps leaving a blistering pain in my side and my leg muscles sore from running in the drizzling rain and cold atmosphere, I reached my destination .Carefully parting the large pine trees branches in my way, effortlessly and taking care not to slip on the rugged yet wet dark road beneath me, I had arrived.