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    Swagtastilicious helper posted an update 6 years, 11 months ago

    Please tell me what you think of my poem… Thank you
    I know you’re trying your hardest but you think its not good enough
    you think everyone is judging so you try to act tough
    Smile through the pain but you couildnt smile forever
    everything was worse you just wanted to get better
    you tried the drugs the alcohol to take away the pain
    it didnt work the only thing it did was make you forget your name
    andnow youre lost and youre scared we can tell you’re afraid
    we tried to help you but you said it was too late
    our words are words youve heard before
    you cried and said ”if there’s a God out there why don’t he care no more”
    you begged and please
    said ”someone please help me”
    im lost maybe not physically but mentally
    ive held on so long I just wanna let go
    people say they’ll miss me when I’m gone but I know they wont
    I tried to expect the unexpected but that didnt even work
    im tired of the pain I’m tired of all the hurt
    my world is a bundled mess
    people seem to think of me like im less
    its like im drowning in fire
    and burning in water and there’s no escape

    • You are so talented @kamaile2001, it’s a deep and thoughtful poem, are you OK?, I’m always here if you ever need to chat or vent, feel free to inbox me if there is anything on your mind, stay strong, you are never alone :) (hugs)

    • @kamaile2001 I like how straight forward but still poetic it is. I write poetry since I was 9 and I really enjoyed your work. If you keep working in your writing you can go far :) Great job
      Oh and I truly enjoyed specially the last part of the poem, the fire and water elements, I love stuff like that in poems.