Do you think this poem is any good?

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Just a little something I wrote, feel free to answer whatever, even if you want to yell at me that it sucks…

Eyes as blues as the sky
I wish that I could fly
Up into the sky
Because at the day you said goodbye
I cried and begged you to take me with you
Maybe the pain in my chest could go away too

Now that you are no longer here
I envy you and I fear
That one day I won’t be able to take it any more
Because your death my life apart tore
Why did you have to go away
You could have chosen to stay

Tags: asked July 21, 2014

2 Answers

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It's pretty good, actually. And I can relate to the topic, darling....feel free to message me.
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it is actually a very good poem . i think there are a few grammatical errors (minor ones). but it is very good. and i am sure if u try again with the same thing u can make it even better and perhaps u will extend it too.